1000 word essay...serious critiquers please...interpretation of art?

I read the entire thing, it was beautiful, and very touching, for me it was the same, always using reading(my fav pastime) writing(diary, poetry) and art(my pion) to escape. I too struggled with trust, and fear, and insecurity. The only thing you could do to it, is condense it, simplify a few lines, you know... 'short sentences for emphasis' and all that crap, lol. But you did a really great job, and i thoroughly enjoyed reading it and I'm sure your teacher will as well.